ext_2882 ([identity profile] browneyedgirl65.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] rm 2010-06-11 08:28 pm (UTC)

Just spotted a few more typos:

"Thomas isn't half bad looking beside; "

besides?

"just angling for plausibly deniability"

just plausible, I think?

"choked off cry has he spills"

as he spills, I'm assuming.

Also,

"moving, finally do do up his flies"

to do up, also, unless he has multiple zippers, I would think just his fly?

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