I realize we..don't really know each other, but I feel that I need to say this.
I never voted for you. Not once. Not ever.
I didn't take into account personality. I didn't take into account whatever others might've thought or said. I looked at your writing, & its style. And it left me wanting.
You do have a great technical talent, in that you structure & interweave things well to make a very good pathway. But in reading, it's like taking a stroll through an industrial park: bland, boring, plastic. There's no life. The key for any writer is to make the reader give a shit; I didn't. I don't know...maybe it's because I was exposed to many of the same things you wrote about & so it seemed ho-hum. I read other entries in your journal & found more of the same. I could very well see where some people would think that you tried to come off as "better than them" due to upbringing, schooling, experiences, & the like. Perhaps that's because you talk so much about these that seem to define you rather than you as a person: I'm gay, I went to finishing school, I write professionally, I was a dominatrix, etc. Great for setting, not so great for breathing life.
I supposed that, if I were you, the thing that I would take away from this would be that technical form & verbosity of language are not enough to hold interest. Just as the schmaltz-based entries & angst-ridden missives get old, so does the textual equivalent of Wonder Bread.
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Date: 2008-02-25 11:04 pm (UTC)I never voted for you. Not once. Not ever.
I didn't take into account personality. I didn't take into account whatever others might've thought or said. I looked at your writing, & its style. And it left me wanting.
You do have a great technical talent, in that you structure & interweave things well to make a very good pathway. But in reading, it's like taking a stroll through an industrial park: bland, boring, plastic. There's no life. The key for any writer is to make the reader give a shit; I didn't. I don't know...maybe it's because I was exposed to many of the same things you wrote about & so it seemed ho-hum. I read other entries in your journal & found more of the same. I could very well see where some people would think that you tried to come off as "better than them" due to upbringing, schooling, experiences, & the like. Perhaps that's because you talk so much about these that seem to define you rather than you as a person: I'm gay, I went to finishing school, I write professionally, I was a dominatrix, etc. Great for setting, not so great for breathing life.
I supposed that, if I were you, the thing that I would take away from this would be that technical form & verbosity of language are not enough to hold interest. Just as the schmaltz-based entries & angst-ridden missives get old, so does the textual equivalent of Wonder Bread.
But hey, what the fuck do I know? I hate writing.