This morning, we were awoken abruptly by sounds of people on the fire escape around dawn. We couldn't see anything though, and there were non-nefarious things it could be, but I think we were a little startled, although so asleep Patty and I just looked at each other and said "Hi." before passing out again.
Part of it also that I'm having trouble temporally locating it and locating it for the reader.
Part of it is that the fic comes with a lot of problems to solve as is, most of which I have solved (the issue of Jack as foreign national, for instance).
Part of it is that I don't know Auggie's voice yet, and I think the fic works better if it's from his perspective, because Jack's issues distract from what I want the story to be about, which is Auggie.
Anyway, it's aggravating the hell out of me.
"There were actually only twenty-three of them," Jack said. His feet didn't move from their spot on his desk, nor did his eyes stray from the novel he had in his hands. "Sixty-nine just had a better ring to it."
"Ah."
"Only because they couldn't kill me," Jack said cheerfully.
From our friend Marilynn. There's something about my physical tension/hesitancy in this combined with how present I am that I really, really like. Which is nice, because I've been hating pictures of me lately.
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Date: 2010-07-20 12:19 am (UTC)Side note of possible interest on the men's magazines: I used to collect children's mystery books, which led to attending a collector's convention which had as a guest star the artist who did the cover art for the yellow-spine Nancy Drew books.
He also did pulp magazine covers. (TBH, a fair number of the linked magazines look to be in a familiar style.)
There is a Nancy Drew cover where Nancy is holding a fan up by her face, with one finger oddly curled around the front. He confessed that it was because his Nancy model was also his pulp model, and he did double-duty with one of her poses. He put "Nancy" in a dress instead of the original torn negligee and replaced the revolver with a fan... but he didn't bother moving the trigger finger.