Ghosts (repost), Snape/OFC, 25/48

Ghosts (repost), Snape/OFC, 25/48
Rating: G – hard-R; this chapter PG
Author’s Notes:

If you don’t know what this is, please read this.

Despite a recent tune-up, this was written in 2001 and is not compliant with the current state of the HP universe.

Your feedback and commentary are always welcome, even for a time capsule such as this.

You can find all chapters here.

If you’re looking for slash, het, poly, Book-6 compliant Slytherin backstory please visit the recently updated Fascilis Descensus Averno a WIP written with kalichan. It features Severus Snape, Lucius & Narcissa Malfoy, Bellatrix & Rodolphus Lestrange and Regulus Black and mostly takes place in 1979 – 1981 but has forays both significantly forward and back in time.
Disclaimer: It’s JKR’s world, I just mess about with it.

( ˝I so rarely see you get mail.˝ )

random

There is either a cricket right outside my window or IN MY ROOM! While this is horrifying beyond horrifying, it's really the only thing I have to complain about right now.

I'm waiting on a ton of freelance $$, some of which should show tomorrow, the rest of which I pretty much expect by Monday.

Vincent FINALLY got kicked off PR, and it was hysterical watching Tim try to look like he was upset about it. Also, Malan now has a blog on the site!

Melusine

While I will save my commentary when I complete the book for Jaida's community, and I'm sure it will contain some of this, I just have to get this out now.

I find it intolerable. I adore the theif character -- his cadence gives me his face, but so far it all stops there.

The problems?

A lot of it has to do with naming. I understand the desire to create a world different from our own and to do so with subtle clues that address relatively mundane things like time, religion and social hierarchy, but I find the frequency with which the author has chosen to do this irksome, mainly because with these many pieces of small information I'm still lacking any cohesive view of the world -- there are no hints to me of history or evolution, just a hodgepodge of words and syllables apparently required of the fantasy genre. They are occassionally clever, but more often distracting, and frequently, I find, not that well imagined. All this matter of septads? Just an awkward way to say "see, fantasy world!" -- it grants the reader nothing.

Other stuff is irritating me as well, including the way it has thus far handled sex work and sex magic(k), although how many readers she expected to have with the frame of reference was probably less than even a handful. Also, the sex needs more or less detail (I don't care which), the way it's been so far it's just logistically sloppy.

Felix's character interests me not at all. Class issues are one of the tropes of fantasy literature that can actually interest me, but writing status stuff in real or fantasy worlds is very very hard unless you have an internal as well as external understanding of status (this is a lot of what the workshop I submitted to Phoenix Rising is about). This may improve (I'm on about page 60), as might the treatment of the sexual issues I've raised above, but I am not counting on it.

Also, couldn't Malkar have a slightly more subtly nefarious name than Malkar? Also, could we please please get some motivaations for him or get a sense of why he's powerful other than we're told he is over and over.

Also, writing people who are high is always hard. Writing people high on drugs you've made up, really, really hard. Still, teh suck!

This book is driving me up the wall.

I don't want to be any of these people, I don't want to know any of these people and I don't want to exist in this world, because I've yet to see what's compelling about it, what it takes it succeed in it, or anything where I go "I could do that better than you." I fail to see the benefits of its constraints or the sexiness of breaking them.

because I am a menace

Just said in email:

"Someone needs to smoke a lot of crack and write Tim Gunn/Snape."

Have fun kids.

(no subject)

Considering I, and a lot of other people, think I bear at least a decent resemblence to a teen Snape, I should be less disturbed when running across a fan art that myself and others think looks uncannily like me. No, I'm not posting the link.

Long day of too many things for too many jobs. Now I'm going to have dinner and make marzipan snakes. This is neither a joke nor a euphemism.